the most lonesome holiday I've ever had.
at the time of my writing this composition ,as we all know ,the seven-day long vacation will be over soon.Now I have to say, never have I spent all the seven-day long vacation in school,even more important,it is the most lonesome holiday I've ever had.I ever think this holiday should be very colourful and make me happy before vacation.Such as traveling ,seeing the sea and so on.On the contrary we can't predict all things happened in the world.My dear friend got injured suddenly. As a result , we had to cancel the original plan, we can do nothing but go to the hospital for looking after the our injured friend.Eating ,sleeping,is my all life in this holiday.      
Now,I have to say ,but for the hurt ,we would have a quite colurful holiday.However,there is no if.


As a result 那句貌似你写了俩谓语。"holiday make me happy" .假期是我开心，总觉得有点别扭，要是加个动名词变成放假使我开心呢，或者说一想到要放七天的假，我就很开心。用as soon as之类的词写呗。再有注意动词单复数哈
最后的虚拟是与过去相反，貌似应该是we would have had.....


刘奇呢，快出来，别光擦车了，这有一孩子让您了给批作文呢

恩！有道理！

天津今晚或明白天有雨。。。。。

让他别总擦车吗，哎…完这下又要下雨了

the most lonesome holiday I've ever had.
at the time of my writing this composition ,as we all know ,the seven-day long vacation will be over soon.Now I have to say, never have I spent all the seven-day long vacation in school,（句号）even more important,it is the most lonesome holiday I've ever had.I ever think （thought）this holiday should be very colourful and （这句看不懂了）make me happy before vacation.（小写，与前句合并）Such as traveling ,seeing the sea and so on.On the contrary we can't predict all things happened in the world.My dear friend got injured suddenly. As a result , we had to cancel the original plan, we can do nothing but go to the hospital for looking after the（删掉the） our injured friend.Eating ,sleeping,is my all life in this holiday.      
Now,I have to say ,but for the hurt（injury） ,we would have a quite colurful holiday.However,there is no if（本来前面就没有if，你要这么用前面最好有个if，呵呵）.


谢谢您啦