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In the morning of the first day of the summer vocation,my parents went to the farm with my young sister and a dog named Ah Fu.Servel minutes later they reached the field. Parents were farming while my sistr and Ah Fu were playing on the bank of the river in a distance.There were some flowers on the river side. What beautiful the flowers are that my sister can't help picking.Suddenly she fell into the river.Ah Fu jumped into the river and barked loudly. Parents heard the barking,ran toward the river immedialy. Ah Fu saved my sister.If Ah Fu hadn't saved her,she would have been in danger.My parents prised Ah Fu.Though Ah Fu is a dof, he is a good friend of mine.
2008年08月24日 07点08分 1
level 6
Parents heard the barking,ran toward the river immedialy.没连词啊,67说过N-1原则的对吧,记得检查细节
2008年08月24日 12点08分 2
level 6
What beautiful the flowers are that my sister can't help picking.感叹句:What beautiful flowers they are! How beautiful the flowers are !能明白么?
2008年08月24日 13点08分 3
level 6
总体感觉还好吧,个人意见19分,运用了高级语法,但是存在必扣错,注意检查,加油啦
2008年08月24日 13点08分 4
level 7
听鱼儿的
2008年09月16日 14点09分 5
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