The first thing that came into my mind when i saw the topic of this thesi is all about philosophy of life.Since I know many people have written on this subject and will do,I am concerned it may be thought presumptuous for me to write on it as well.Besides I am not an expert on philosophy ,fundemantally speaking ,I am not wisdom.It is almost impossible for a college freshman who just read several books about the essential knowledge of eastern and western philosophy to analyze the huge question from Rationalism, Metaphysics,Existentialism,or Positivism,to explain it by using syllogism,or dialectical statement. I couldn`t ask deep questions because my thought is plain.It is a fact that I`m not capable of talking so big a topic .I choose to talk about one aspect of this question, value of life.Again,it is too big for me to control it,I`d like to quote facts or unchangable examples to support my idea. Neither I nor you are the authority, the fact is. It is sensible to go straight to a discussion of how things are in real life and not waste time with a discussion of an imaginary world .So what is the value of life and what kinda life do you wan? Definitely we all are seeking for a colorful and meaningful life.When we r young and energetic,certainly ambituous, we have a dream and try hard to fufil it .IT is a good thing to have a dream and it`s never better than to stick to it until it become reality.The process maybe hard,since the pursuit of happiness is a bittersweet thing. You need several skills or qualities ,say,courage,perserverance ,creativity etc, to ensure that you will never give up, however the difficulties are. You wake ,meet difficulty, overcome it ,go on ,be tired ,carry on ,meet again,overcome again........ Consequently you obtain what u want and become famous and be invited to ur son`s school to share ur experience . You talk about your legend and all the pupils get inspired. They want to be someone like you , typical American Dream. But for me, I would rather believe that you r leading the wrong way. Let me have some reasonable guesses.As far as life is concerned, it is quite short for us to achieve whatever we want,too short to be planned before. Naturally we have certain needs, we need them urgently and we try to meet those needs. Imagine a person who has a dream to be a boss and finally become a boss at his fifties.I don`t think we should admire him, I don`t think the efforts are well paid ,either. Our desire is endless,you want this today,you want that tomorrow. One dream is realised,another fucking one jump up out of the blue. That is my attitude towards life: Be content with whatever circumstances you are involved in . The more you want ,the less happiness you get .The so-called happiness of pursuit is not worthy at all. The intrinsic worth of life is to be free from anything. If we are naked,we can enjoy the sunshine more,if we have no shelters ,we get closer to the Nature.Someone may think that I am crazy,we just have different ideology.Sometimes the truth is you want less, you get more. Those who have a rather low living standard can be richer than those who have a high GDP standard.When you realize all of these someday, possibly you will share your outrage and bemusement at the insanity of the universe we are supposed to inherit. SO I choose freedom.I choose to live like a DOG. Maybe my ideais not clearly expressed , because I have a mixture of feelings toward this topic, and my idea is complicated.I just want to ensure that everyone who read this will have some thoughts they never think before.That is enough..If not,the composition is totally a failure and my value of life is not valuable at all!

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I like the ending."Maybe my ideais not clearly expressed"

就这样吧，，大家能看懂知道是哪个词就行。。。！~！~本身写的也不好。

Style6/10Command of the English Language 6/10Substance2/10Total14/30 = 47/100Comments:It is humble to admit your lack of competence, but don’t over-do it or it becomes an apology for the rest of your essay. Again, lack of connection between “too much… too little” and the philosophical discussion the author embarks upon.

语言： 22/401.语法、拼写错误。 （0/5）拼写错误很多，还有些错把wise写成名词wisdom用的基础错误。用microsoft word是个不错的建议。标的符号的使用没有章法，读起来非常困难。建议以后写文章细心一点。they are nothing but flaws2.fluently and precisely. (7/10) 没有chi-english倾向，good flow. 3.sentence variety. (5/10) bad sentence variety. too much "it is + adj + to do / that ..."4.effective vocabulary. (10/15) You can use some of academic vocabularies well. Nevertheless, try to think of more ways of saying "because", you are using "since" all the time. 内容： 32/601.insightful position：To some extent, it is philosophical. But what a mess. what's your point? Philosophy is not about write whatever came to you. It's not dear diary moment anyway. (5/10)2.well-focused: (4/10) You need to spend more time on reading and analyse the question. 3.well-organized：(5/10)You need learn how to write an intro. It's not an apology letter. 4.complexity: I've seen a bit of complexity, yet not quite clear (6/10)5.persuasive examples：average. (7/10)6.conveys meaning skillfully：well, Pretty bad. (5/10)

Contestant No.63: liuke8686 54/100语言功底不错，能够清楚地表达意思。拼写错误，比较幼稚的语法错误过多，标点符号使用不规范。严重跑题。建议写作文的时候，仔细审题，然后列个提纲，看看每一段观点是否清楚，是否与题目relative. ，想到什么写什么，这是你最大的问题。