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★★英语吧第三届夏季征文大赛开始★★【题目公布】【报名开始】 半年一度的英语吧征文大赛已经成功举办两届,比赛备受关注,也展现出许多优秀的作品。经过两位大吧主协商,第三届征文大赛正式开始报名。此次比赛沿袭第二节大赛的传统,将分为中级高级两组比赛。理论上讲,建议大学以前的的中国学生参加中级组,国外学生及国内大学以上学历水平者参与高级组。当然,也欢迎国内中学生挑战高级组。与上次不同,本次比赛将马上公布参赛题目,参赛者进行规定题目的习作,除诗歌外,文体不限。本次征文大赛向所有热爱英语的朋友们敞开大门,不过还是要请有兴趣的朋友看一下报名条件:1.百度贴吧的注册用户2.热爱英文写作 >>>最后文章的优劣会有谁来评比呢?比赛最后会把参选的文章汇总公布出来,主要由大小吧主以及一些英语水平高的吧友进行打分评出最佳以及其余各个名次。参加比赛的吧友不具备打分资格。 ★比赛题目★【Intermediate Group】: In what ways does the media influence ordinary people?【Advanced Group】: It is often thought to be a positive part of their development when young people are rebellious. To what extent is it a positive thing when young people rebel against society in general? 参赛者依据所报组不同进行以上题目的写作。 ★比赛指导★ 此次评分将由评委从综合角度评判,将习作作为整体来看,与上次分项评分不同。有一些英语佳作应有的标准提供给大家,作为参考。【主旨】文章鼓励开放性、思维发散性 【语言】1.语法、拼写错误。 2.fluently and precisely. 没有跟着感觉走,语言没有过分啰嗦。 3.sentence variety. 有“较多”的长短句变化。 4.effective vocabulary. 用词准确,能够运用词所表达的潜在含义或感情色彩。并且有较好的word variety,不重复。 【内容】1.insightful position:在有全面深刻理解的基础上,观点最好新颖独到,但必须保证能自圆其说。 2.well-focused:简单说就是不跑题。中心论点明确,全文不跑题;各段主题句明确,围绕主题句论述 3.well-organized:文章采用的论述结构,分几个部分论述,每部分有几段,各部分、各段间的关系是什么都很明确 4.complexity:事物的两面性(同一事物有优点就有缺点,相比较的事物有各自的优缺点),从多角度分析事物(分析不同领域中,不同情况下)。 5.persuasive examples:用来支持reason的,使抽象的reason更具体,更易被读者理解,从而产生共鸣,或使其更可信,更有说服力。可用自己的经历,引言。 6.conveys meaning skillfully:文章的行文方向,起承转合不用明显的标志词 first, second 。。。 报名截止日期: 2008年7月20日参赛文章交稿截止: 2008年7月31日希望各位吧友踊跃报名,展现自己的英语实力,继续前两届比赛的辉煌
公布成绩啦!!! ★★★英语吧第二届冬季征文大赛★★★感谢大家的参与和关注,现在公布成绩. 总分100分,括号前为总分,括号内分别是中外评委打的分。犹豫是高级组,native评委打分都比较严格。高级组:Contestant No.5: monolog 85.5 (98,73)http://hi.baidu.com/dentdelion/blog/item/399f1b974b58bb6954fb9639.html A highly philosophical and original approach to the topic. Able to avoid using a “complaining tone”. Good use of quotations.Some minor awkward phrases: e.g. potential not potentiality, “when they have lost all their world possessions” sounds more elegant than “when they lose the money”, “fools at maths” rather than “they are fools in math learning”, “mold us in its own image”, “first and final victory”Contestant No.4: helenayf 80(97,63)http://hi.baidu.com/helenayf/blog/item/c24270d108ad303c9a502749.html Good use of first person voice throughout piece, however the casual writing style of “huh” and “wow” isn’t really appropriate and wasn’t used consistently throughout your writing.The structure of your piece could have been improved with a clear introduction, body and conclusion. The ideas and complaints you voiced were relevant however it was felt that perhaps you could have explored some of the issues further. Try not to use a whiney voice.You have made two references to your idol but you haven’t said who that person was, you need to identify them and provide us with some background about them so as to demonstrate why you hold them in such high esteem.When you use quotes they need context and explanation. You have included a very long quote in your piece, but haven’t followed it up with an analysis or explanation. Shorter quotes are better, it is always better to use your own words, you can reference someone else’s ideas without directly quoting them.Overall a good effort and we look forward to reading more of your work.Contestant No.44: 樱花纷落の季节 79 (73,67)http://cid-85ed42b1d1683a67.spaces.live.com/default.aspx Excellent style and use of language. Excellent structure. My only complaint: most of what’s written has almost nothing to do with the topic ““So much to see, yet so little time”. While the essay would receive high grades in English literature class, it is simply off-topic. Contestant No.6: 阿跑 78(96,60)http://hi.baidu.com/ap813/blog/item/70e9f3f8d7982b0bd8f9fde3.html The title should be in correct form “too much… too little”. The ideas are certainly sophisticated, but are not clearly expressed.It is far better to convey meaning through simplicity, clarity and short sentences than to convey ability through listing impressive SAT words. A 96-word sentence belongs to an insurance contract not a short story. E.g. why use “not quiet differently” when you can use “similarly” or at least “not quite differently”? “None of these therapies paid off”.There is nothing wrong with using big words, but clarity must never be compromised in the process. Contestant No.8: Mariamne 72.5 (95,50)http://vivien-april.spaces.live.com/blog/cns!3A6EBDC561C5FAA!506.entry Very captivating and visually stunning introduction. However, the story soon becomes way too repetitive with the persistent wind/scar/wound/flower imageries. Do not overdose your essay with metaphors - this tends to distract the plot and the characters. We get it – the wind is ferocious and always “whipping” – get over it. "All the stuffs related to him when she found out he was just playing around with her" - this sentence seems out of place given your other elegant and metaphorical expressions. "nothingness" not "empty nothingness" - this is a tautologyFinally, the story seems to have nothing to do with the topic – I cannot award high marks in this area. Although the piece itself is an example of “too much description, too little substance”Contestant No.13: ~乖乖小布丁~ 71 (95,47)http://hi.baidu.com/changchang217/blog/item/5b9bb3356022ff8fa71e12e6.html Appears to be a list of disjunctive ideas without a coherent theme or flow. More of a random blog entry than a well-thought essay. Many awkward phrases: “keep up with the changes” rather than “follow some of the changes”
中华译神,关于对你的质疑的答复。 你发个贴申请下,如果大家都同意你来做,我可以让你替我的。我想问你个问题,你觉得我们各位为什么要来这个地方? 你觉得我每天在这泡着回答那么多问题,你说我水平低,随便你,最起码我是尽心尽力去帮各位,错了的那是我能力有限还需要提高,我不是神,我也需要学习。 看见垃圾贴要一个一个删,遇到捣乱的要封,无赖的不管三七二十一在这说什么的都有,译神我真的搞不懂,为什么你就不能踏下心来帮帮别人,谁都有过初级阶段,都需要有人指点,我当时学英语的时候不会了只能自己扣,连个问的人都没有,现在有这个平台,就是要让一些水平还可以的,学的多的人去带带那些刚入门的或者迷茫的人,因为我体验过那种不知所措的时候想要有个人拉一把的感觉。我来告诉你我的答案,我来这里是因为快乐,虽然很少的快乐,但却让我心里很踏实。每次能够尽力去帮别人翻译一些句子或者解答一些问题,能看到他们一个真心的“谢”字,我心里是充满了喜悦的,起码我是一个能够给别人帮助的人。说实话,我讨厌你,还有一切在这里以侮辱别人为乐的人, 非常非常地痛恨,你在不断的破坏我心里英语吧应该有的样子。所以,每次看到捣乱的人,我会很生气,咬牙切齿,我恨不得能够一拳打在你脸上,打得皮开肉绽,真的,如果你在我面前的话,我一定会那么做。这也让我很痛苦,我不明白,你们这样做为了什么,贬低别人真的能抬高自己,让自己快乐吗?我真的不明白。虽然很痛苦,但我还是很珍惜看着别人对自己说谢谢的喜悦,虽然不多,但为了这点微不足道的欣慰,我就一定会在这里呆下去...
[海神]实用短句 11. The sooner the better. (越快越好。) 12. When is the most convenient [方便的;便利的] time for you? 13. Take your time.(慢慢来/别着急。) 14. I'm mad about Bruce Lee.(我迷死李小龙了。) I'm crazy[着迷的;狂热爱好的] about rock music. (我对摇滚乐很着迷。) 15. How do I address you?(我怎么称呼你?) 16. What was your name again? (请再说一次名字好吗?) 17. Would you care for[喜欢] a cup of coffee?(要杯咖啡吗?) 18. She turns me off.(她使我厌烦。) 19. So far so good.(目前为止,一切都好。) 20. It drives[逼迫;迫使] me crazy.(它把我逼疯了。) 21. She never showed up[出席;露面].(她一直没有出现。) 22. That's not like him.(那不象是他的风格。) 23. I couldn't get through.(电话打不通。) 24. I got sick and tired of hotels.(我讨厌旅馆。) 25. Be my guest.(请便、别客气) 26. Can you keep an eye on my bag?(帮我看一下包好吗?) 27. Let's keep in touch.(让我们保持联系。) 28. Let's call it a day[决定或同意暂时或永久停止(进行某事)]. 29. I couldn't help[避免;阻止] it.(我没办法。) 30. Something's come up[发生/出现].(有点事/出事了) 31. Let's get to the point[要点/核心问题].(让我们来谈要点。) 32. Keep that in mind.(记住那件事。) 33. That was a close call.(太危险了/千钧一发) 34. I'll be looking forward to it.(我将期待这一天。) 35. Chances are slim[渺茫的;微小的].(机会很小。) 36. Far from it.(一点也不。) 37. I’m behind in my work.(我工作进度落后了。) 38. It's a pain in the neck[麻烦的事(人)].(那真是件麻烦事) 39. We're in the same boat.(我们处境相同。) 40. My mouth is watering.(我在流口水了。) 41. What do you recommend?(你推荐什么?) 42. I ache all over.(我浑身酸痛。) 43. I have a runny nose.(我流鼻涕。) 44. It's out of the question.(这是不可能的。) 45. Do you have any openings?(你们有空缺吗?) 46. It doesn't make any difference.(没什么差别/无所谓。) 47. I'm fed up[极其厌烦] with him.(我受够他了。) 48. You can count on[指望;依赖] us.(你可以信赖我们。) 49. It doesn't work.(坏了;不动了。) 50. It's better than nothing.(总比什么都没有好。)
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