好吧，于是试试看翻译成英文是啥感觉……大家尽情板砖，以及不要被恶心到~这是Eva大人自己最喜欢的文之一，就这么活生生被我糟蹋了……Taxad
Chapter 1
When my name was on every history book of the middle earth, not everybody would agree I was a image of greatness. But most would agree I had been an outstanding archer. Nobody could imagine that, for a time, I was tortured when thinking about my archery, and that bows and arrows had once been my least favourite things.
How could people believe such things happen on me? That was the reason my elder brothers always frowned at me, not knowing what to do. Elves of the Mirkwood were all fearless soldiers and excellent archers. Yet the youngest son of King Thranduil could not hit the center of the target at several hundred years of age.
“Legolas has the keenest eyes and ears among all of us,” my third brother had always been on my side. Mother passed to the hall of Mandos not long after my birth. Father…undoubtedly Father had little time to deal with me, and my first and second brothers were just as busy. Therefore third brother had been a parent to me.
“He could perceive flying birds high above the sky earlier then I did since a very young age, and reacts sooner than me to every miner activities around,” third brother said, “and you’ve all seen him running, light as a feather and fast as a breeze. These are all great potentials lead to an excellent soldier.”
“These are all useless facts if he does not become a good archer.” Second brother was always sharp and straightforward.
“Oh, give him some time! He just needs to adjust himself to more skilled postures,” third brother said, forgetting how much time they had given me. Elves of my age had all been to the battlefields. As for me…the annual archery test had become my worst nightmare. I failed after retried, and retried after failed.
“We have the best mentor and training ground of Middle Earth. If there’s something missing, it has to be himself. He must try harder. I don’t think Father is willing to see his youngest son fail again.” First brother said, looking into my eye. His gaze always made me out of wits, and brought guilty feeling as if I was the worst offspring who brought shame to the House of Orophin. However, I’d rather be stared by him for half an hour than to be shot a glanced from Father even once.


大家尽情纠错尽情批判吧……otz
于是文采完全地没有……

回复：4楼
汗，老实说我现在对挑毛病很是惴惴……XDXD （eva啊你发火还真是很恐怖……orz）
我看了一遍这一章，整体感觉还好，觉得最大问题是在一些时态和语法问题上……允许我提个建议的话，你先把这个放一放，过一两天再来看，你可能自己就会发现许多问题的，XD 再就是，我觉得目前的译文还不能说反映出了eva的文风，游侠尚需努力，XD （但我要承认的是，eva那种行文的微妙感觉是不容易换成英文还没有折扣的，这有两种语言各自的特点以及我们习惯的语言氛围问题……）


汗，喷泉，你应该很了解我了啊，我很情绪化，但是发过一通就好了。你千万别介意啊。
文风神马的其实我自己没啥感觉，应该挺合吧，反正我觉得这个英文挺美的XD

噗，其实我就是那个经常冒出来煞风景的，该我说“千万别介意”才对，XD

于是呢，我突然很囧地发现，我居然居然把没有改过的初稿复制上来了……
想个办法自裁算了= =
不过喷泉大人说得对，放一段时间会看出很多问题的~先发一个初稿上来冒个泡泡，第二章已经搞定了，第三章还在努力，这些都先不放上来好了~

以及我一直以为yew是日本紫杉，原来原著就是用的yew……充分暴露了我其实没怎么看英文版宝钻的血腥现实~
我个人对第一章最不满意，对第二章的感觉好很多……还有喷泉这样的能手可以尽情挑刺，我这种自己根本就很少钻研的小球是绝对不会对挑刺有任何反感的。何况偶的英文基本上跟Gimili的精灵语一样流畅，您说我能有啥情绪么么么么……

回复：7楼
等我把修改版发到你邮箱里吧~~~反正在这里晒稿和发给你对我来说都是一样滴，偶是射不中语言靶心的小孩= =

挑挑刺也是要的，一贯只听赞誉的话，就看不到短处，我应该谢谢你给我指错。关键还是我看资料原著不够仔细的说，我们不要歪游侠的楼了。
对了游侠，松香bar会不会太大了，感觉像是在擦肥皂了啊XDXDXD a slice of resin就好了吧?

发邮件还是贴出来都可以啊，不过我挑刺无能，一来能力有限，二来看到这东西太醉心估计看不出什么错的。

回复：12楼
我用来擦弓弦和琴的就是蛮大的一块啊~（诶？难道我太野蛮了？）基本上像一个鸡蛋那么大。因为这东西其实磨损还挺快的，基本上也就跟肥皂一样快哈哈~
不过不知道中国的琴是不是耗松香比较的？而且我的弓已经七八年没用过，估计这时候再开，弦就费了……

为了正楼，我来给个我在游侠译文基础上修改的前两段——声明这仅仅是参考，作为非英语母语的人，写出来的东西实在是……不好说……orz
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eva的原文：
当整个中州在历史上记录下我的名字，人们不会记得我的功勋如何伟大，但是多半会承认我是一个不错的弓箭手。没有人知道我曾经怎样为练习箭法的事情发愁，更不会有人想到弓与箭一度是我最不喜欢的两件东西。
说出去的确很少有人会相信，这也是当初我的几个兄长总是皱着眉头看我，不知道应该拿我怎么办的原因——幽暗密林的精灵个个箭法出众，骁勇善战。瑟兰迪尔王最小的儿子几百岁了却还无法射中箭靶的中心。
游侠的译文：
When my name was on every history book of the middle earth, not everybody would agree I was a image of greatness. But most would agree I had been an outstanding archer. Nobody could imagine that, for a time, I was tortured when thinking about my archery, and that bows and arrows had once been my least favourite things.
How could people believe such things happen on me? That was the reason my elder brothers always frowned at me, not knowing what to do. Elves of the Mirkwood were all fearless soldiers and excellent archers. Yet the youngest son of King Thranduil could not hit the center of the target at several hundred years of age.
我的修改：
When my name went down in history in the Middle-earth, people would not remember how great my feats had been, but most likely they would recognize me as an outstanding archer. Nobody knew how troubled I had been by practicing archery, nor would they imagine that once bows and arrows had been what I disliked most.
This was truly difficult for one to believe. And this was why my elder brothers always frowned at me then, not knowing what to do. All Elves of the Mirkwood were excellent archers and fearless soldiers. Yet the youngest son of King Thranduil simp1y could not hit the center of a target even when he was several hundred years old.


回复：15楼
啊~nice！！！！喷泉果然是太厉害了（眼睛冒星星），请您做我的老师吧！！！我自己都觉得第一章开始很烂……哈哈……
对您的景仰简直犹如对泉家族的首领一般无二了……（抱大腿中……）

回复：16楼
……（才发现这个表情很传神，orz）
其实，真理是：挑别人的毛病永远比自己动手要容易许多，orz 而且我觉得我这个版本撑死算达意，美感实在是没有……


回复：17楼
不管，老师！好吧就请无畏地接受我的景仰好了，否则我会像图小强一样愤青的……（为什么要随便把喷泉比作beleg……）

然后果然一回头就发现问题，跟当初翻SBT时一样……orz
再次修改：
When my name went down in history, people in the Middle-earth would not remember how great my feats had been, but most likely they would recognize me as an outstanding archer. Nobody knew how troubled I had been by practicing archery, nor would they imagine that once bows and arrows had been what I disliked most.
This was truly difficult for one to believe. And this was why my elder brothers always frowned at me then, not knowing what to do. Almost all Elves of Mirkwood were excellent archers and fearless soldiers. Yet the youngest son of King Thranduil simp1y could not hit the center of a target even when he was several hundred years old.

有鸡蛋那么大？
我那块很小，直径不超过2厘米，难道被人用次品蒙了？= =
我没真拉过小提琴，那个是摆设，所以其实不知道，呵呵

不得不说，喷泉老师简直严谨程度可比Elrond大人……
以及老师我有一个问题，为啥要把all elves 改成almost？为了突出莱王子作为其中子集却不是优秀弓箭手么……？

回复：20楼
啊哈，不过我的是用来擦弓弦的，不是用来擦琴的……只是可以握在掌心里而已~不是小提琴的弓啦，是真正的弓箭，可惜是蒙古式的，并没有精灵弓箭的美感，而且弦特别特别勒手……

恩因为莱同学自己也是其中一员，汗，如此看是我的原文有语病的说。