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If I am given a choice between beauty and intelligence, obviously I would choose intelligence.
Fristly, beauty is outward appearance, it born with a man or a woman. If a woman is beautiful, she can catch others’ eyes when they first meet. However, with the development of cosmetics and cosmetics surgery, beauty is a simple things for many people. But as time goes on, it will disappear and you will get nothing from it.
Scondly, intelligence is more important to our live. In my mind, intelligence means you are able to learn more knowledge. It may increase your experience and open up your angle of view. Intelligence likes wine, the older the better. Intelligence will make you more attractive than beauty as time goes by.
Therefore, that’s why I choose intelligence.