假设有一批英国中学生将来你校就读，校方要求你在开班典礼上介绍一下学校的有关要求。请按以下要点写一篇发言稿。
●上学要穿戴整洁
●上课不迟到、早退
●保持校园清洁
●走路靠右行；若要骑车上学，请办自行车许可证
注重：_______.
1. 词数：100左右；
2. 可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；
3. 开头和结尾已为你写好。
参考词汇：许可证——permit
   Good morning, dear friends. Welcome to our school.What I want to tell you now is some of our school rules.
   As a student here , before all the others , dress clean and tidy is a most important thing that you should do . It's also a best way to leave a good impression on the others . Besides ,   you must arrive school on time and don't leave school until it is over . Furthermore , school is a place where we study in . You   should keep it clean all the time . Only in this way can you give yourself a good environment to study . Finally ,   please keep it on right when you walk on the road . You can't go to school by bike without a bicycle permit .
   Hope you will have a good time here during the study .
                                        
   Thanks
帮帮忙修改一下吧~~多谢老师~

最后的格式错了~也不知道Thanks怎么就跑那去了~传时明明在最后面的~

我来说一下个人观点哈
首先这句“As a student here , before all the others , dress clean and tidy is a most important thing that you should do .”没有主语啊。其次dress是动词，不能用clean and tidy来修饰了。因为clean 和tidy是形容词，不能修饰动词啊。还有这个before all the others是首先的意思吗？？？
然后是“you must arrive school on time”，其中的 arrive是不及物动词，不能直接接宾语，应该加一个at或in。再有我觉得那个must改成have to,可能从语气上来说会更委婉一些。哦，还有这个“and don't leave school until it is over . ”，and前后应该一致，所以用情态动词吧，用shouldn't。另外 it指代的东西不是很明确。建议写成classes are over.
这个定语从句“school is a place where we study in”连词要是用where,那后面就不用再写in了。
这句“Only in this way can you give yourself a good environment to study .” study后应加in.
“please （keep it ）on right when you walk on the road .” 应该是keep yourselves吧
我觉得15分，建议楼主以后注意一下语法细节。句子中没有主语或出现双谓语的现象一定要避免。一点个人建议，希望能够在写作上帮到你。


回复：3楼
多谢啦~~我功底不太好~麻烦你了哈~~

没关系，别怕错，多练练就好了。

回复：5楼
嗯嗯~~最近正在练啊~唉~~写过的作文太少了~~除了考试几乎不写啊~
姐姐好厉害啊~~应该不是高三吧~~

Good morning, dear friends. Welcome to our school.What I want to tell you now is some of our school rules.
    As a student here , before all the others , dressing clean and tidy is a most important thing that you should do . It's also a best way to leave a good impression on the others . Besides ,   you have to arrive in school on time and shouldn't leave school until it is over . Furthermore , school is a place where we study . You    should keep it clean all the time . Only in this way can you give yourself a good environment to study in . Finally ,    please keep yourselves on right when you walk on the road . You can't go to school by bike without a bicycle permit .
    Hope you will have a good time here during the study .
                                        
                                                               Thanks
姐姐帮忙看下这样改可以么~~~

呵呵，被你猜中了，我大一了。
英文写作不能总都等着考试，平时自己也要多练。
还有最后几个月的时间，抓紧练吧，写完了，大家一起交流，不是挺好吗，都能有提高。
加油吧~~

我连完型阅读都等考试= =

回复：9楼
me too 啊~~

回复：7楼
" before all the others "你是想说“首先”吗？我没见过这样的说法，你从哪里看到的？还是用first of all比较保险。
until it is over 建议写成 until classes are over.
you have to arrive （in ）school on time 这里指学校，介词用at比较合适。
“You can't go to school by bike without a bicycle permit .”这句话你写的没错。我觉的这句话可以换一种方式表达。例如：If you were to go to school by
bike,you would handle a bicycle permit .这样写会给你的文章增彩的。会提分的。
建议尝试一下.。


Only if更顺当

回复：11楼
哦哦晓得了~~多谢姐姐啦~~

短句子不用复杂的语法会更地道
例如Furthermore , school is a place where we study in.可以写成school is a place for study
当然你那样写没错哈~

这篇作文是真题么？

题外话…考试我作文终于得了18分…热泪盈眶啊…

回复：16楼
哈哈，恭喜你了。

回复：13楼
不用谢，继续练吧，相信你一定会有提高的。

回复：15楼
是啊~~~好像是05的安徽题