大家好：我想提高自己的英语水平，每周周末（暂定）会发一篇自己写的小短文，里面肯定有很多语法错误啦……还有什么其他错误希望大家帮忙指正，而且如果有更简洁贴切的描写方法也请告诉我~非常非常感谢！欢迎讨论~

防吞大家好： 我想提高自己的英语水平，每周周末（暂定）会发一篇自己写的小短文，里面肯定有很多语法错误啦……还有什么其他错误希望大家帮忙指正，而且如果有更简洁贴切的描写方法也请告诉我~非常非常感谢！欢迎讨论~

Oct. 19th 2008Days hav e gone when I was wanderlasting in the school with the closest friends by my side . Now we are separated in different universities and are too busy to keep in touch with each other . Sometimes when I sit under the trees , watching autumn leaves dancing in the sky , kissing the ground as gentle as a sigh , the memories would swallow me . I try to remember their smiles , preventing them from fading in my life .But one can never just absorb in the past , and I know it’s time for me to set out , though on my own.

Days have gone (past) when I was wanderlasting in the school with the closest friends by my side .??? ( 这句中文的意思是？） Now we (we now 比较好）are separated , (We are all in) different universities and are too busy to keep in touch with each other . Sometimes when I sit under the trees , watching (the) autumn leaves dancing in the sky , kissing the ground as gentle as a sigh( 和叹气一样？o_o， 总觉得亲吻和叹气用一起有点）, the memories would swallow（吞掉你？什么意思呢） me. I try to remember their smiles , （so that they will not be ) faded, in my life . But one can never just absorb (吸收？）in the past ,(用living in the past比较好） and I know it’s time for me to set out(你要表达的意思是？ , though on my own. 总体来说写的很好噢，加油哦！~ =）

我发挥了一下哦=）你参考下巴 Days have passed by, it has been a long time since ,when I was wander-lasting in the school with the closest friends by my side. we now are separated , We are all in different universities and are too busy with the things that going on in our lives ,it's hard to keep in touch with each other . When i am along, Sometimes,when i sit under the trees , watching the autumn leaves dancing swiftly in the sky , kissing the ground gently on their landing. Some of the memories that we`ve share have faded in my mind, I tried to remember them, their smiles , i will try not to forget them and not letting them faded in my memory I know, we shouldn't be living in the past and I know it’s time for me to start a new journey,an other stage ,in my live, without them .觉得结尾有点凄凉，帮你改成 我会在没有他们陪伴中，开始人生的另外一个段（一段旅行）

are too busy with the things that going on in our lives =are too busy with the things that we usually do in our lives(that we have to go through in our lives)i will try not to forget them and not letting them faded in my memory = I will try not to forget them and let them fade away in my mind.

谢谢大家~