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Perseverance is a kind of attitude toward life. Teachers and parents often teach us about this. But sometimes, we can’t do it.
I think little animals can do this much better than us. One sunny day in the summer holidays, a careless bird flew into our house. It flew around the rooms and attracted the attention of the cat. The cat ran towards the bird fast.
The bird was panic and hid into the storage room. But the cat was too fat to act in the room, so it couldn’t get the bird.
The next morning, the bird went out from room and was discovered by the cat who stayed there for a night. Finally, the bird flew away safely. I was shocked by the cat. This unremitting cat never gave up to its prey.
Cats can do this thing easily and why can’t we? When we meet trouble, we often choose to give up. Because of this, we can’t succeed in many things.
Like the cat, we must never give up on the road to the goal, and we’ll achieve our goal.

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给吾一点时间

例子好像有点怪怪的......用受姬回覆有点困难所以可能有点乱
line 1-towards应该是不小心打错吧
如果改成teachers and parents often encourage us to deal with tasks with perseverance. However,it is difficult to do so.或许好一点
其实把perseverance说是a kind of attitude towards life会不会有点不准确呢.....
perseverance is the attitude that we should try our best to achieve an aim with continuous effort.
之类的如何？（参考了字典）
其实perseverance是noun，所以不应该用do it啦，可以说成do things with perseverance或是act perseveringly之类，但不能单纯说do this
little animals can often act perseveringly in their daily lives.
想不到要怎样compare抱歉.......
TBC

.我是中国人【严肃】

直接写one sunny day就可以了
I saw a careless bird flew into my house.
不知道grammar有没有错
It flew around and drew the attention of my cat
没有attract the attention的，其实只用attract也行，但它的意思是吸引，好像有点不适合这句
then the cat immediately chased after the bird.
run towards好像不太能显示出追的意思
还有，用quickly会更好
panic是n./v.但不是adj.
the bird was scared by the cat so it hid into the storage.
查了字典发现storage已经有仓库的意思
but the cat was too fat to enter the storage,so it.....
act in是指...？
话说动物是用which不是who
我认为既然主角是猫，改一下会比较好
TBC

Although the cat could not enter the storage to catch the bird, it didn't give up easily.Instead,it stayed for a whole night waiting for the bird
要吃饭了待会再说

a cat can persevere so as to acheive its goal and why can't we?when we face difficulties,we often choose to give up.but we can never succeed if we always give up easily.just like the cat,we must not give up before we achieve our goal and we will succeed.
最后还是想说一下这例子有点怪，该怎麼说呢，就是有点不够正面（？），而且也很难比较人和动物哪个较能坚持....毕竟我们是人所以还是用点人的例子比较好，但既然你写了就不要改了
你改不改也没关系，总之继续努力吧

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