这是写到英国的信 。初次尝试漏洞百出请大神们指教，轻喷谢谢~~[url]http://不胜感激[/url]

单词写得不错！！！

be full of poor糟糕的不是pool

不是childrenhood 是childhoood

*I‘m one of your fans from Rizhao which is a wonderful city located in the east of China.
*I’m glad that you could receive this letter"
*I hope you would like it.
*I really admire your professional acting in “Harry Potter”
* Ginny，a brave，beautiful and intelligent girl who is my favourite character in the movie.
*The movie made my childhood colourful and filled with dreams.
*Sorry for my poor English :p"
Best wishes，
XXX
还有"Dear XXX,"用逗号，不是:
我觉得你的次序好像掉乱了，“Besides，I have drawn some pictures of......”至到“I hope you would like it 应该放在最后，然后喜欢她的原因应该放在前面。