这是很早之前学生的一篇范文。反馈的分数越来越高，90多的100多的比比皆是，也希望大家可以在作文上取得更好的成绩！ Should the university campus be open to tourists? With the growing realization on the significance of entretainment, universities have began（begun） to be open to tourists. In other words, an increasing number of people prefer to visit campuses. Should the university campus be open to tourists? Opinions are divided into two opposite categories. Some people maintain that the campus should be open. First and foremost, the viewers can have an excellent view(不甚了解其意思). Besides, the viewers will have access to get a host of information of the campus vividly. Last but not least, universitis can show the greatness of them. Other people argue that the campus should not be open, (应该中间加上连接部分，比如taking into account that ) it is harmful to students not only physically but also psychologically. Taking into account all the factors of the opening, I can draw a conclusion certainly that the campus should be open. It is obvious that it can promote the harmony of universitis and the society. In a word, the opening is beneficial for not only the individuals in their personal life but also the society as a whole. With the growing realization on the significance of an increasing number of Should the university campus be open to tourists? （用问句开头，非常好，在课上讲解过） maintain First and foremost, Besides, Last but not least, have access to a host of not only physically but also psychologically. It is obvious that In a word for not only the individuals in their personal life but also the society as a whole. Taking into account draw a conclusion harmony我把非常闪光的部分截取下来了，都是课上讲过的，使用得很恰当。同时也有一些自己的具体内容，使文章看上去很和谐，有实际内容，并且语言华丽！81分等于 11分-12分了，很不错！大家平时的练习应该注意：1注意高级语言在3个段落中的搭配 2保证每次练习的高质量，内容服务于语言 3有机会仍然要提高自身水平（通过背诵，比如说背诵阅读理解文章），因为毕竟30%的内容要求自己来写作取得良好的分数关键在于自己的练习和体会！祝大家学业有成，事业有成！这个是从老师的BLOG上复制的 ，不会被告吧？？呵呵！