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今年天津的高考作文，帮我细改一下，大概打个分题目：假设你校举办看图征文活动，题目为“How to protect our eyesight”.请你用英文写一篇短文，指出图中所反映的现象并从阅读时间，光线，眼睛保健及睡眠等方面谈谈保护视力的具体做法How to Protect our EyesightSo important is eye sigaht that we must protect it.According to the picture ,we can find a few of students who wear the glasses. As all my known short-sight can be made by many cases.To my knowledge what makes us short-sighted is that the time of sleeping. We must have more time to have sleeping. More over we should’t stay in the sunshine with reading books,however we should control the time when we have a read. In my opinion,hardly had we（ take an examination of eyes when we were tired）.Last but not least eyesight is nothing but significant to us. So we must protect it well.那是我初稿，下面是老师看过略微改过一下的，有的她说不好的我没改。最可气的是！我按猛哥推荐的那天利38套写的，那上面题目是“眼睛保健操及睡眠方面”！！！太坑人了！括号里就是我想了老么半天才想出来的（貌似还不对）How to Protect our EyesightSo important is eye sigaht that we must protect it.According to the picture ,we can find a few of students who wear the glasses. As we all know short-sight can be caused by many reasons.To my knowledge what makes us short-sighted is that the time of sleeping. We must have more time to sleep. More over we should’t stay in the sunshine with reading books,however we should limit the time when we read. In my opinion,hardly had we to do something with our eyes when we were tired.Last but not least eyesight is (nothing but significant) to us. So we must protect it well.我刚上完特训上，这里边像nothing but…还有important全等于significant。我老师都不让我那么用，她说significant是有意义的意思，nothing but也不能用，她说因为nothing是名词but后面不能跟形容词。还有就hardly那句我写的时候就有点瞎凑.完了老师说hardly when是还没来得及。。。不能当一。。。就。。。还有啊，老师说这作文我也就得个18及格分，要按她说的改可能能得20~
2007年08月25日 14点08分
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