这是广东2005年的作文，讲的是《守株待兔》的故事 Once upon in a time，，with the sun rising in the east，a farmer went to work in the fields with a hoe .Despite the fact that this job was tiresome ,he still worked as usual. After a little ,what made him surprised was that a rabbit bumped into a tree ,consequence, the rabbit died .He was fairly gay . It was the dead rabbit that became his dinner. After that day, he still went to the fields .Instead of farming ,he stayed around the tree that the rabbit bumped into to wait .So foolish was the idea that he wanted that another rabbit would bumped into the tree again . He didn’t farm at all .What was worse ,he became poor soon . The miracle will not take place every day .No hard work ,no success. 刘奇老师~您不介意在贴吧里叫您老大吧~不知道我这篇文章写得怎么样~您看过之后打个分数吧 ^_^

Once upon in a time，，with the sun rising in the east，a farmer went to work in the fields with a hoe .Despite the fact that this job was tiresome ,he still worked as usual. After a little (while) ,what made him surprised was that a rabbit bumped into a tree ,(.Consequently,)consequence, the rabbit died .He was fairly gay(还是cheerful吧) . It was the dead rabbit that became his dinner. After that day, he still went to the fields .Instead of farming ,he stayed around the tree that the rabbit bumped into to wait .So foolish was the idea that he wanted that another rabbit would bumped into the tree again . He didn’t farm at all .What was worse ,he became poor soon . The miracle will not take place every day .No hard work ,no success.最后一句不如写成Just as the proverb goes that: No pains, no gains.总体不错，不过高级语法用恰当是关键不必用的那么多。你的领悟力还是很强的。

谢谢老大~那么这篇作文~如果按照25分满分~可以得多少分呢？

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是老大吗？谢谢您啊~~^_^

老大~问一道单选~ When we plan our vacation ,mother often offers _____ suggestions.A careful B practical C effective D acceptable答案选的是B 可是我觉得C也可以阿 C的意思是有效的 为什么C不可以呢？