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Dear Editor, I'm writing to tell you about the discussion we've had about whether an entrance fee should be charged for parks. 40 percent of the students think the public should pay an entrance fee for parks,but the price shouldn't be very high.Parks,in their opinion ,need much money to pay gardeners'wage and to buy various kinds of new plants.Oppositely,60 percent of the students think against them.Park,as all may know,is the place where they can relax themselves.If an entrance fee were to be charged for parks,,parks would have to built some walls and gates.It would have an bad influence on the impression of the city to others. If they were to continue to do that ,they would pay high price. Yours truly, Li Hua
2007年07月19日 10点07分 1
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文章整体还不错,不过不要过多集中的使用高级语法(尤其是同一种)个人意见20分左右对比类文章相对比较好写,因为不太需要像故事类文章挖掘它的内在逻辑关系,所以,要仔细看来大的笔记积累关键的连接词在多练笔就行了
2007年07月20日 04点07分 2
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