我是那个54特长生 我英语一向很糟 我写了篇2004天津的作文 希望您能指教With the fairly speedy development of society "How pupil allocate pocket money"problem is becoming increasingly popular.A remote oriental philospher said,every coin has two sides.That is to say,there is no agreement among citizens.There is a wide variety of factors that may have our life become full more and more.To begin with if our pocket money is reserve in the bank,we may cultivate our saving habit.In addition if it is use to buy books,we may broaden our horizon and enlarge our interest,say,music,sport,collection of stamps,etc.

看来你很长时间没有写过作文，开头就不对，不是对比类的文章啊，而且开头的废话太多，开头就一句然后就开始写要点。

看看这篇的结构Today, we’ll have a discussion about the "As a middle-school student, how to use the pocket money which was given by parents?" I have three suggestions: In the first, saving our pocket money in the bank is valuable .It is wonderful idea to make a fine habit--no wasting. (To begin with, puting our pocket money in the bank can help us form a habit of saving money.) Moreover, the books, having been bought, by the pocket money, could give us a great deal of knowledge. Besides, (the money can also be spent on our hobbies, such as...)in our interested things, as music、sports、stamps collection and so on, the pocket money could be used. Not fairly much as pocket money is, it could be used meaningful. If we couldn't use the pocket money (wisely)in a significant place, the pocket money would be useless(用词不当). Don’t you think so?