Dear Bob, Here is a good news that I have found a house for you during the time which you will be in China.The house is on the 3rd floor of a building situating on the Fangcao street where stands a bus stop,which makes it convenient for you to go to school.The house that is 25 square metres is big enough to hold the fornitures such as bed,desk and sofa.The house also offers the bath room and kitchen.Perfect as the conditon is,the rent is 500yuan every month,which is very reasonable.I believe you will be satisfied with this house. Yours, Li Hua

大奇，这算不算你和我说的多个非谓语在一句话里？

Dear Bob, Here is a good news that I have found a house for you during the time (which)--(when) you (will be)(are) in China.The house is on the 3rd floor of a building situating on the Fangcao street where stands a bus stop,which (makes it)(is) convenient for you to go to school.The house that is 25 square metres is big enough to hold the fornitures such as (a)bed,(a)desk and (a)sofa.The house also offers the bath room and kitchen.Perfect as the conditon is,the rent is 500yuan every month,which is very reasonable.I believe you will be satisfied with this house. Yours, Li Hua 2楼,我没有明白你说的,文章18,9分缺少关联词,看起来总体感觉有点乱,语法上还可以.此类文章是不容易写好的,因为避免不开恶心词汇.要有较大的词汇量才能写的精彩.

需要加什么样的关联词啊,怎么加呢,大奇