I read the news that Beijing TV station will hold a talent show called“Learning Chinese, Singing Chinese Song”for foreigner in July this year. In terms of(of 是介词后面是不能加一个完整句子的,切记!!!) you are stud(y)ing at a Beijing University , therefore(therefore是副词不能连接两个句子) , this will be a good chance for you to improve your Chinese . I like you to have a try . If you want to join in it , you can sign up at Beijing TV station before 30th June . It will be hold(held) at 18th July . I will give you a hand all the time if you need . I am your supporter forever . Good luck to you . 18分左右,因为有低级语法错误,这些错误是会影响你作文档次的.

Michael 非常感谢，我会坚持继续写的请多多帮忙啦 谢谢（不好意思，手一哆嗦发了两个）

应该发两个不一样的。哈哈。