Dear friends, Although there is no doubt that we have a variety of choices to deal with our pocket money,on no account can we abuse it.Some hold the view that we should put it into the bank in order to get a habit of saving.On the other hand,it is nessesary of us to use it in correct way such as purchasing some books which can give us more knowledge.What's more,music,sports and stamp which can delight ourselves are what we can spend it on.Limitted as the pocket money is,we still hope to do more things.If the more pocket money should be offered,the more interests in daily life we could enjoy.

Dear friends, Although there is no doubt that we have a variety of choices to deal with our pocket money,on no account can we abuse it.Some hold the view that we should put it into the bank in order to get a habit of saving.On the other hand,it is nessesary of us to use it in correct way such as purchasing some books which can give us much knowledge.What's more,music,sports and stamp which can delight ourselves are what we can spend it on.Limitted as the pocket money is,we still hope to do more things with it.If the more pocket money should be offered,the more interests in daily life we could enjoy. 又看了下,觉得有小问题,现在改过来了,麻烦你了,Micheal

Dear friends, Although（In spite of the fact that） there is no doubt that we have a variety of choices to deal with our pocket money,on no account can we abuse it.Some hold the view that we should put it into the bank in order to get a habit of saving.On the other hand,it is nessesary of us to use it in correct way such as purchasing some books which can give us much knowledge.What's more,music,sports and stamp(s) which can delight ourselves are what we can spend it on.Limitted as the pocket money is,we still hope to do more things with it.If the more pocket money should be offered,the more interest in daily life we could enjoy. 最后一句的立意不好，整体的文章语言可以，高级语法运用的还算恰当．２０分以上．

谢谢,刚才心急了点, 呵呵