我都2周没写作文了 太忙了 只物理就3大本习题，郁闷Michael 我写了06年福建卷的作文：良好的饮食习惯。麻烦你批改 谢谢Just as the proverb gose that health is better than wealth. Some people doesn't form healthy eating bahits. What surprise us was that some people doesn't have a breakfast every morning for losing their weight. As all may know, breakfast provide our body with about 30% energy.Some people being fond of having a snake ,reduce redundant body fat.Snake is a kind of junk food. It is reach in high fat and colorie. What worse, others are particular about food. Eating diversity is good to our health. So much eat some people that give rise to indigestion.This deed hard to our health .We not eating too much, eat on time.If we were to form healthy eating habits,we should have a healthy body.No one can deny that health is the foundation for a successful career. 

Some people doesn't form healthy eating bahits. 都some people了还doesn't??

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Just as the proverb gose that health is better than wealth. Some people doesn't(!!!!) form healthy eating bahits(habits). What surprise(d) us was that some people doesn't(!!!) have a breakfast every morning for losing their weight. As all may know, breakfast(as all may know放这里更好 ) provide(该加三单不加,不该加的瞎加,怒了) our body with about 30% energy.Some people being fond of having a snake(这是蛇的意思,服了) ,reduce redundant body fat.Snake(!!!) is a kind of junk food. It is reach(rich) in high fat and colorie. What('s) worse, others are particular about food. Eating diversity(应该用副词) is good to our health. So much eat(看不懂) some people that give rise to indigestion.This deed(无动词) hard to our health .We not eating too much, eat on time.If we were to form healthy eating habits,we should have a healthy body.No one can deny that health is the foundation for a successful career. 太多用词错误了,你的积极单词量有问题14分,文章中间逻辑混乱.