我把刚才那篇改了一下，应该可以了吧。Good afternoon, everybody. I'm XXX.I like singing pop songs, especially Japan pop music. Therefore, I’dlike to introduce a beautiful and lovely girl to you now. The one I will recommend is Mai Kuraki-----a young pop singer in Japan.Mai Kuraki is a university student in Japan, she studies very well. When she was a little girl, she went to America to study. Also, she likes music and singing fanatically. Despite the pressure of study, she managed to find time to practice singing everyday.In Japan ,Mai Kuraki is known by everyone nowadays, no matter how old he is. It is certain that Mai Kuraki sings much well, I feel her songs can give us courage. When I was bad for study, her songs always give me power, which tells me not to give up.I think Mai Kuraki is a singer who must be respected, and her spirit is worth being learnt.Thank you for Mai Kuraki.

狂谢!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!我,我尊称您为师父!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

你再看看有无语法错误，我也有一小段时间没碰英语了。

就是第四段第一行的he,改为she而已..........暂时没发现

worth being learnt应该改为worth learning

哦,另外,也谢雨季,他是原作者.我会向同学大说特说你们的超能力滴

worth doing sth =值得做...

这个he指代的是前面的everyone。

真是惭愧啊书到用时方恨少，以后要好好学英语了

哦.......我以为你的意思是无论衣多少岁我们都LIKE她

worth learning？可是这句用的是被动啊。

worth doing sth 就可以表示被动 是英文中的特殊用法

对，想起来了，是这么用的。不好意思，改一下。

我...........我还没学到被动不被动啊,老天

高手真高！

再顶

ding

羽野兄的强大在下早已领教过...

呵呵，不是盖的~

第三行的to you know不应该加；第二段第一句“Mai Kuraki is a university student in Japan, she studies very well.”中间“，”改为“。”第二段的“Also, she likes music and singing fanatically.”中的singing改成sings第二段最后一个单词everyday应该改为every day,因为是做时间状语。第三段“When I was bad for study,”作者的意思应该是学习不好的时候，个人觉得改成“when i was not doing well in study”,因为be bad for是对。。。有害的意思