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谁能帮忙改一下我的托福作文,语法问题好像满多的,囧 Nowadays, as society is developing more and more, numerous people consider that it is better for children to grow up in the city than in countryside on account of the educational level and modern facilities. However, I deem that countryside is more suitable for children to grow up in. First of all, I hold a belief that the ambiance of rural area is appropriate for children to study. Most of the schools which in countryside are quite small. Besides, there are not too many students in such a small school. This means that students will get more attention from teachers. Teachers will also have enough time to teach students in accordance with their aptitude. The simple and honest folk custom will make children devote themselves to study. In the second place, I think countryside is safer than big city. For instance, living away from the road and therefore there is no chance for little kids getting hit when they wonder off. In addition, it is unnecessary for parents fear for their children when they leave home because of the lower crime rate. In the end, countryside brings children better health. The air in countryside is clean and crisp. There is no need to worry about lack of space for outdoor exercise. Children can eat fresh fruit and vegetables as well. On the contrary, big city has a large amount of factories and varies kinds of vehicles which cause air pollution and lots of noise. Children will become weak as a result of the pollution. To sum up, it is better for children to grow up in the countryside than in a big city. Not only because of the educational environment but also the health and safety.
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