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初中水平,一篇文章求改 无论是挑错,还是把句式改的漂亮些都好 Igrow up in a blessed family, my parents are loving and take great care of me.Considering my innocent memory of the childhood and comfortable growth, parentsdon’t discipline me very much. Ican keep concentrate while the teachers are giving lessons so that I can gain theknowledge from teachers. Since the period of the primary school, until the timeI write the essay, I’m always a top student. 24 points more than the admissionstandards of Xiaoshi Senior High School, which is national key high school, I got574 points in the senior high school entrance exam. Besides,I take part in the school’s various activities actively, such as thecompetitions of calligraphy and the sports competitions. Music fascinates me, I,therefore, didn’t only learn to play the piano, but also tried to play the acousticguitar. I often debate with my parents, and gradually, have formed the criticalthinking during the discussions. Recommended by my father, philosophy was knownby me, I’m going to study it, regarding it as a interest. Among my interests, especially,I love painting and spend extended time on it. Ipossess several basic self-caring abilities. In 2008, I took part in the summercamping alone which was about Inner Mongolia and organized by Chinese NationalGeography, being away from my parents. Afterthe senior high school entrance exam, I practiced at a community that was nextto my settlement. The work was made up by trivial matters, I accomplished myown tasks, once I was even at work after 23 o’clock for a special task. Thenfor the training of TOEFL, I ended my first experience of practice and left forShanghai. I would take part in voluntary activities when I studied in NewOriental if there were, for instance, interacting with children in the Children’sHospital. Inthe future, I hope that I can be more independent and confident, able to makefriends with the individuals who have unique perspectives and common hobbieswith me, form a cooperative spirit. I’m going for it.
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